Reuben A

I love the first chapter. The only thing that I would change, is how did the human like creature look? Except for the human likeness of it.

Thanks for al your critts, I am sure to edit.

Thank you all for the critique, I'll definitely edit.

Gees! You write brilliantly! I don't think that there's anything to improve. Is Elmwood street a real street in Londen?

MeghnaK Great so far. what's the main character's name? How did she 'journey' from the bed to the sky? Did she lie down, close her eyes, and then suddenly she ...

What is the 'Gulrich'? I think you should tell us a bit more about Alsana and her three friends and who selected them and why. But other than that, I ...

Thanks Bickazer, I really need all the critique I can find. Reuben A

Hi Kaylyn, The first Chapter is wonderful....I like the idea of a story beginning with a dream. Great. Reuben A